Review: When Destiny Knocks by Heather M. White

When Destiny Knocks by Heather M. White

My rating: 1 of 5 stars

When Destiny Knocks is one of the worst books I've ever read. It seems to have been reviewed well so far, but I have no idea why. This books needs better editing, more fleshed out characters and more interesting settings and baddies.

The Good: The only thing I have good to say about When Destiny Knocks is that the action is fast-paced and short.

The Bad: When Destiny Knocks is full of typos and grammatical errors. The author has done a disservice to indie authors as a whole by releasing her book without the polish is deserves. This type of writing is what gives indie authors a bad reputation. The Kindle edition has grammar errors or typos on nearly every page. The narrator also can't seem to decide whether to use past or present tense verbs, sometimes even within the same sentence.

Even with grammar errors aside, the writing isn't very good. The setting is flat, the characters are either cliches or flat, the monsters are definite cliches, and the heroine is a whiny brat that everyone feels like they have to protect (which they apparently aren't very good at).

Relationships form at the drop of a hat and for no particular reason. Everyone loves the heroine even though all she ever does is whine and have super powers. Most of her whining has to do with really vapid things. Even though ostensibly her mother has just died, she spends most of time whining about how she can't be with a character she just met but apparently can't live without.

Whenever the action gets slow, the author just throws in another monster cliche for good measure. None of the monsters are created in interesting ways and piling them on one after the other is just imaginative laziness.

The Bottom Line: This is some of the worst writing I've ever read. I won't be reading the sequel.